Hey guys. Songwriting is a major hobby of mine, and I like to writeabout things that affect my life, or simply things that inspire me. My great uncle is terminally ill, and my latest song, entitled Harry's song, is about that. Please comment, and don't be afraid to criticize, or give tips to how I should improve it. I have only added part of it, as I would like to keep it my own ie uncopied!

My old uncle's drooped against his pillow
Having a big fight with life and losing
I begin to laugh, why I do not know
Aware that his long life is presently fading
But he is holding on tight with both hands
To the rope that pulls you up to heaven
He may be an old and forgetful man
But he laughs as if he's still eleven
Innocence is an enviable thing...